An exploration of Chinese university students’ argumentative writing: an intervention case study
This paper reports on a six-month intervention study demonstrating that a Systemic Functional Linguistics (SFL) genre approach helped Chinese EFL university students improve their argumentative writing by shifting from subjective to objective orientations and reducing high-certainty language, although their use of obligation words remained largely unchanged.
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Imagine you're trying to convince your friends to skip a boring movie and go to a concert instead. If you scream, "THIS IS THE BEST CONCERT EVER! YOU MUST GO! IT'S OBVIOUSLY THE ONLY CHOICE!" you might actually make them roll their eyes and tune you out. You're being too loud, too sure, and a little bit pushy.
This is exactly what a group of researchers found when they looked at how Chinese university students write arguments in English. They took a class of 12 third-year students and gave them a special six-month "writing gym" to train their brains. The goal? To stop them from shouting their opinions and start inviting their readers into a conversation.
Here is what happened before and after the training, based on the study.
The "Before" Picture: The Loud Speaker
Before the training, the students wrote essays that were like a one-way megaphone. When they tried to convince the reader, they relied heavily on emotional, subjective words (like "great," "good," or "dazzling"). In their first round of essays, 55% of the words they used to show their opinion were these emotional, personal feelings. Only 45% were objective, fact-based words (like "relevant" or "positive").
It was like they were trying to win a debate by wearing a bright neon sign that said, "I FEEL THIS WAY!"
They also used a lot of "forceful" language. Think of it as using a sledgehammer to crack a nut. The students packed their essays with words that demanded agreement, such as "definitely," "must," "should," and "obviously." In fact, in their first essays, they used 220 of these "modality" words (words that show certainty or obligation) across just 12 essays. That's an average of 18 to 19 forceful words in every single 300-word essay. That's one forceful word for every 16 words they wrote!
The researchers noticed that the students thought being loud and certain was the key to winning. They believed that if they sounded super sure, the reader would be forced to agree.
The Training: Learning the Art of the Nudge
The researchers introduced a new way of thinking called the "SFL genre approach." Instead of just memorizing a list of "good words" or following a rigid template, the students learned that writing is a social dance. They learned that to really persuade someone, you have to leave them some room to think. You have to be a bit more humble and a bit less bossy.
They practiced using language that opens a door for the reader to walk through, rather than a wall that blocks them.
The "After" Picture: The Open Door
After the six-month training, the students' writing changed in some really cool ways, though not perfectly.
1. From Feelings to Facts
The biggest shift was in the type of words they used. In their second round of essays, the students stopped relying so much on emotional outbursts.
- Subjective (emotional) words dropped: They went from 55% of their opinion words down to just 26%.
- Objective (judgmental) words soared: These went from 45% up to 74%.
- Total words increased: Interestingly, they actually used more opinion words overall (jumping from 85 total in the first round to 103 in the second), but they swapped the "emotional" ones for "objective" ones.
It was like they traded their neon "I FEEL" sign for a well-organized chart that said, "Here is the evidence."
2. Turning Down the Volume
The students also learned to stop shouting. They reduced their use of "High Certainty" words (like "definitely" or "guaranteed") by a huge amount.
- In the first essay, they used 42 of these high-force words.
- In the second essay, that number dropped to just 13.
They also started using more "Low Probability" words (like "may," "could," or "perhaps"). This is like saying, "Here is a possibility you might want to consider," instead of "This is the only truth." It gives the reader space to think, which actually makes the argument stronger.
3. The One Thing They Haven't Mastered Yet
There was one area where the students didn't change much. They still used a lot of "Obligation" words—words that tell people what they should do, like "should," "ought to," or "must."
- In the first essay, they used 78 of these words.
- In the second essay, they used 72.
That's a tiny drop, but not a big one. The researchers suggest that the students are still holding onto the idea that they need to force their views on the reader. They haven't quite learned to let go of the "you must do this" attitude yet.
What the Students Said
When the researchers asked the students what they learned, the students were surprised. One student said the training "overturned" their view of writing. They realized that before, they were just memorizing rules and lists of "opinionated words" to get a good grade. Now, they understood why those words mattered.
One student admitted, "I thought if I sound very sure... my audience will be influenced. I now understand argumentation is not a quarrel and you don't need to force the reader in a forceful way!"
The Bottom Line
The study suggests that with the right training, students can learn to stop shouting and start persuading. They learned to swap emotional outbursts for objective facts and to trade "I am 100% sure" for "Here is a strong possibility."
However, the researchers are careful to say this isn't a magic fix. The students still struggle with the "you must" attitude, suggesting that one semester of training isn't enough to completely change how they impose their views on others. But the shift from a subjective, emotional style to an objective, negotiated one is a massive step forward. It shows that when you give writers the tools to understand how language works, they can build better bridges to their readers.
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